alteredBees wrote: ↑Sun Aug 13, 2023 11:03 pm
a poem ive written:
spoilered bc its kinda a downer? idk
i wrote another yesterday but i didnt want to post two days in a row
kinda the same repeating idea motif but i do other stuff
Spoiler!
there is something i need to do but i cant do it
there is something i want to do but i cant do it
there is something i can do but i cant do it
i have too many games to play
i have too many songs to hear
i have too many books to read
every game is boring
every song is boring
every book is boring
nothing can be played
nothing can be heard
nothing can be read
and so i sit here staring at my pc
and so i sit here doing nothing
and so i sit here feeling empty
and so i sit here
Last edited by alteredBees on Tue Aug 15, 2023 5:30 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Last night, at the dawn. A young man shows up.
Hell fire burns down the surroundings. The ice coffin quietly lies.
So the time comes. Here, ring the bell of dawn.
The dark night will soon be over...
alteredBees wrote: ↑Tue Aug 15, 2023 5:06 pm
i wrote another yesterday but i didnt want to post two days in a row
kinda the same repeating idea motif but i do other stuff
Spoiler!
there is something i need to do but i cant do it
there is something i want to do but i cant do it
there is something i can do but i cant do it
i have too many games to play
i have too many songs to hear
i have too many books to read
every game is boring
every song is boring
every book is boring
nothing can be played
nothing can be heard
nothing can be read
and so i sit here staring at my pc
and so i sit here doing nothing
and so i sit here feeling empty
and so i sit here
Oh if u put two spoilers in the same post you can't actually open the second one, jsyk.
I like these poems! The repetitive structure of them evokes the same feeling that they're about, I think. When nothing feels worth doing and you know you should be doing something but you can't because something feels terribly wrong with you, so you go days and days and days doing the same thing and they all blend together. I don't know if that's the intent but that's how I feel sometimes and I think these two poems capture that feeling pretty well! Thank you for posting them :}
Signature Under Construction(until I think of a better one)
didnt work I GUESS so heres the post from two posts ago
Spoiler!
there is something i need to do but i cant do it
there is something i want to do but i cant do it
there is something i can do but i cant do it
i have too many games to play
i have too many songs to hear
i have too many books to read
every game is boring
every song is boring
every book is boring
nothing can be played
nothing can be heard
nothing can be read
and so i sit here staring at my pc
and so i sit here doing nothing
and so i sit here feeling empty
and so i sit here
Last night, at the dawn. A young man shows up.
Hell fire burns down the surroundings. The ice coffin quietly lies.
So the time comes. Here, ring the bell of dawn.
The dark night will soon be over...
Last night, at the dawn. A young man shows up.
Hell fire burns down the surroundings. The ice coffin quietly lies.
So the time comes. Here, ring the bell of dawn.
The dark night will soon be over...